zero draft
who:
-main character girl
-new girl
-relatives
-aunt and uncle
-cousins
-kids at school
-kids who give character hard time
-kids who befriend the character
where:
-hawaii
-school
-comes from kentucky
what:
-decides to move to get a better education
-comes on own, without parents/family
-lives with aunty and uncle
-goes to school, trying to adapt to the new culture
-some kids make fun of her because she is different
-she is also struggling in school because it is more difficult
-she also misses her family and hometown
-thinks of moving back because it might be easier
-talks with younger cousin
-cousin tells her what her mom always says
-dont give up when the going gets tough
-things always work out in the end, you just have to hang in there long enough
-decides to go stay, and tough it out
-someone finally befriends her, and volunteers to tutor her
-she realizes that her young cousin was right, she shouldn't give up
Feedback Questions:
- Is my story original, yet believable?
_ - Is there a clear conflict?
_ - Are there complications that add enough suspense, tension, or interest? Does the reader maintain interest?
_ - Is the resolution satisfying? What could be added or changed?
_ - Does the story flow clearly and logically?
Mari, your story seemed somewhat believable, but why did she move to Hawaii, couldn't she have just gone to a different school in Kentucky? (add additional info about why) Your story kind of reminded me of the movie "Ice Princess" from the disney channel, but still almost completely different.
who:
-main character girl
-new girl
-relatives
-aunt and uncle
-cousins
-kids at school
-kids who give character hard time
-kids who befriend the character
where:
-hawaii
-school
-comes from kentucky
what:
-decides to move to get a better education
-comes on own, without parents/family
-lives with aunty and uncle
-goes to school, trying to adapt to the new culture
-some kids make fun of her because she is different
-she is also struggling in school because it is more difficult
-she also misses her family and hometown
-thinks of moving back because it might be easier
-talks with younger cousin
-cousin tells her what her mom always says
-dont give up when the going gets tough
-things always work out in the end, you just have to hang in there long enough
-decides to go stay, and tough it out
-someone finally befriends her, and volunteers to tutor her
-she realizes that her young cousin was right, she shouldn't give up
Feedback Questions:
- Is my story original, yet believable?
_ - Is there a clear conflict?
_ - Are there complications that add enough suspense, tension, or interest? Does the reader maintain interest?
_ - Is the resolution satisfying? What could be added or changed?
_ - Does the story flow clearly and logically?
Mari, your story seemed somewhat believable, but why did she move to Hawaii, couldn't she have just gone to a different school in Kentucky? (add additional info about why) Your story kind of reminded me of the movie "Ice Princess" from the disney channel, but still almost completely different.